Post by leodibkk on Jan 17, 2016 4:23:29 GMT
Hi Teacher Jill,
I would be grateful if you can comment and evaluate my writing task 1 and 2 GT
Task 1
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Your city’s municipal government has asked the general public to submit suggestions
outlining ways the city can improve.
Write a letter to the municipal government. In your letter
• describe a problem you’ve experienced in the city
• suggest a way the city can eliminate this problem
• explain how this will improve life in the city
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Dear Sir,
In response to the local authorities’ request on feasible improvement of the city, I am writing to mention an issue that our city is confronting and would like to advise a solution to omit it.
It is obvious to observe that a number of pavements in the city are full of garbage. This consequently attracts rats; as a consequence, posts potential threats to our public’s health.
In addition, it can be seen that these pavements, which are often dirty, are not equipped with bin or any kind of container which can contains trash. Therefore, I believe that if there are such appropriate bins in place, the problem will rapidly be tackled.
As a result, the city’s walkways are free of garbage and look tidy. Thus, threats to people’s health will be alleviated or even eradicated. Hence, life in the city is dramatically improved.
I would be grateful to see our life becomes better with your precious efforts.
Your faithfully,
Di Truong
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Task 2
Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new
things and take risks. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to sup-
port your choice.
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These days, the world economy has become dramatically competitive, people are required to be either highly competent and experienced or a fast learner and a risk taker. Whilst many individuals gravitate towards doing things that had been done well, others intend to try otherwise. However, it is most preferable to do things out of one’s comfort zone and take risks. This essay will justify the selected opinion by analyzing relevant facts.
Initially, being a risk taker has subsequently increased the rate of success. Take Poramace for instance, who is currently the director of Bred-IT Thailand, had accepted an offer to work on a project in Djibouti in which he had to manage a team of data migration. Djibouti are known to some as a small undeveloped african nation; therefore, it was highly likely that the project might fail. This might consequently affect Poramace’s management reputation. Nevertheless, disregarding of the nation’s situation, he managed to complete the job successfully; as a result, this man has recently been promoted to be the director of Bred-IT Thailand. This shows that adventure takers gain vast success; thus, it is evidently intriguing to take risks when doing the job.
Additionally, trying things out of the box affords a chance to achieve knowledge and skills. The development team of Facebook can be referred as an example, this group had been asked to utilize Big Data, which was totally new to the team, to create the Facebook messenger application. Tremendous time had then been invested in researching and forming the prototype by the team members. After a year, a Facebook chat application was publicly released and it has grabbed significant attention from users. The members of the team also confidently informed the manager that they had successfully master the technology of Big Data. This thus fortify that doing unconventional things pays off.
In summary, it is completely desirable to work on new things and uncertain tasks. This is strongly supported by the facts that rate of success has been lifted and knowledge has been achieved by doing so.
I would be grateful if you can comment and evaluate my writing task 1 and 2 GT
Task 1
----------------
Your city’s municipal government has asked the general public to submit suggestions
outlining ways the city can improve.
Write a letter to the municipal government. In your letter
• describe a problem you’ve experienced in the city
• suggest a way the city can eliminate this problem
• explain how this will improve life in the city
----------------
Dear Sir,
In response to the local authorities’ request on feasible improvement of the city, I am writing to mention an issue that our city is confronting and would like to advise a solution to omit it.
It is obvious to observe that a number of pavements in the city are full of garbage. This consequently attracts rats; as a consequence, posts potential threats to our public’s health.
In addition, it can be seen that these pavements, which are often dirty, are not equipped with bin or any kind of container which can contains trash. Therefore, I believe that if there are such appropriate bins in place, the problem will rapidly be tackled.
As a result, the city’s walkways are free of garbage and look tidy. Thus, threats to people’s health will be alleviated or even eradicated. Hence, life in the city is dramatically improved.
I would be grateful to see our life becomes better with your precious efforts.
Your faithfully,
Di Truong
---------------------------------------------
Task 2
Some people like to do only what they already do well. Other people prefer to try new
things and take risks. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to sup-
port your choice.
-------------------------------------------------
These days, the world economy has become dramatically competitive, people are required to be either highly competent and experienced or a fast learner and a risk taker. Whilst many individuals gravitate towards doing things that had been done well, others intend to try otherwise. However, it is most preferable to do things out of one’s comfort zone and take risks. This essay will justify the selected opinion by analyzing relevant facts.
Initially, being a risk taker has subsequently increased the rate of success. Take Poramace for instance, who is currently the director of Bred-IT Thailand, had accepted an offer to work on a project in Djibouti in which he had to manage a team of data migration. Djibouti are known to some as a small undeveloped african nation; therefore, it was highly likely that the project might fail. This might consequently affect Poramace’s management reputation. Nevertheless, disregarding of the nation’s situation, he managed to complete the job successfully; as a result, this man has recently been promoted to be the director of Bred-IT Thailand. This shows that adventure takers gain vast success; thus, it is evidently intriguing to take risks when doing the job.
Additionally, trying things out of the box affords a chance to achieve knowledge and skills. The development team of Facebook can be referred as an example, this group had been asked to utilize Big Data, which was totally new to the team, to create the Facebook messenger application. Tremendous time had then been invested in researching and forming the prototype by the team members. After a year, a Facebook chat application was publicly released and it has grabbed significant attention from users. The members of the team also confidently informed the manager that they had successfully master the technology of Big Data. This thus fortify that doing unconventional things pays off.
In summary, it is completely desirable to work on new things and uncertain tasks. This is strongly supported by the facts that rate of success has been lifted and knowledge has been achieved by doing so.
