Post by Admin on Nov 30, 2015 6:50:41 GMT
Some people believe that zoos where animals are kept in man-made environment should no longer exist in the 21st century. Do you agree or disagree?
In the past, zoos existed as a source of entertainment for the public who would otherwise never see exotic animals such as penguins or tigers. However, I believe they have a role in the modern world in terms of preservation, breeding programmes and education.
First, zoos preserve animals under threat in the wild. They can mimic habitats lost through industrialisation or environmental damage. They can build up entire ecosystems in artificial buildings to support animals which would otherwise have nowhere to live. The Smithsonian National Zoo in America, for example, has recreated the steamy climate of the Amazon in one exhibit, making it suitable for rainforest species.
Second, many zoos run breeding programmes, cooperating with other zoos to enrich the gene pool of endangered or threatened species. They then release animals back into the wild, ensuring healthy populations for the future. For instance, Zoos Victoria is part of a group breeding rare orange-bellied parrots and helping to reintroduce them to Tasmania and Australia.
Third, zoos are educational resources, not only explaining the natural world to children and school groups, but also taking part in scientific research in conjunction with universities. For example, the University of Glasgow worked with the Chengdu Panda Base in China to synthesize milk suitable for orphaned panda babies. Such research would not have been possible in the field.
In conclusion, the old-fashioned zoo, a place of misery and confinement for animals, needs to be replaced everywhere by the 21st century zoo; a place of education and protection.
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Essay notes:
The essay answers the question by disagreeing with the statement.
The writer’s position is clearly stated at the outset and the thesis statement introduces three ideas to the examiner which each form one paragraph. The essay uses clear sequence discourse markers (first, second, third) and demonstrates logical progression throughout. Each idea is supported with an example. The essay uses some less common vocabulary and there are a range of grammatical structures.
Vocabulary:
K4: artificial, enrich, exotic, habitats, synthesize, tigers
K5: mimic, misery, orphaned, zoo
K6: conjunction, ecosystems, parrots
K8: penguins
K9: panda
In the past, zoos existed as a source of entertainment for the public who would otherwise never see exotic animals such as penguins or tigers. However, I believe they have a role in the modern world in terms of preservation, breeding programmes and education.
First, zoos preserve animals under threat in the wild. They can mimic habitats lost through industrialisation or environmental damage. They can build up entire ecosystems in artificial buildings to support animals which would otherwise have nowhere to live. The Smithsonian National Zoo in America, for example, has recreated the steamy climate of the Amazon in one exhibit, making it suitable for rainforest species.
Second, many zoos run breeding programmes, cooperating with other zoos to enrich the gene pool of endangered or threatened species. They then release animals back into the wild, ensuring healthy populations for the future. For instance, Zoos Victoria is part of a group breeding rare orange-bellied parrots and helping to reintroduce them to Tasmania and Australia.
Third, zoos are educational resources, not only explaining the natural world to children and school groups, but also taking part in scientific research in conjunction with universities. For example, the University of Glasgow worked with the Chengdu Panda Base in China to synthesize milk suitable for orphaned panda babies. Such research would not have been possible in the field.
In conclusion, the old-fashioned zoo, a place of misery and confinement for animals, needs to be replaced everywhere by the 21st century zoo; a place of education and protection.
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Essay notes:
The essay answers the question by disagreeing with the statement.
The writer’s position is clearly stated at the outset and the thesis statement introduces three ideas to the examiner which each form one paragraph. The essay uses clear sequence discourse markers (first, second, third) and demonstrates logical progression throughout. Each idea is supported with an example. The essay uses some less common vocabulary and there are a range of grammatical structures.
Vocabulary:
K4: artificial, enrich, exotic, habitats, synthesize, tigers
K5: mimic, misery, orphaned, zoo
K6: conjunction, ecosystems, parrots
K8: penguins
K9: panda